"Coffee!" I yell firmly at the dog thats jumping from table to table, I told Mrs Norrie that yelling at him will just make him more excited. I knew that i shouldn't of(have) taken my brother's physco(psycho) dog to school, (knowing him he's probably been doing experiments on him (careful of changing tense))he probably does experiments on him, hes(He's) a nutcase according to Mrs Norrie. Oh look shes(she's) managed to grab him by the collar and choke him. I took him off her so i don't walk home with a dead dog. I should sue her for animal abuse, but theres(there's) no way im(I'm) saying anything like that to HER. Once a boy in my class called Sam stood up to Mrs Norrie, no one else has ever tried because after Mrs Norrie got hold of him we never saw him again. Im not suprised that shes(she's) yelling insults about coffee(Coffee), my brother, me and further other people(is this how your character would say it?). I take Coffee to the cupboard at the back of the class, im(I'm) just about to close the cupboard door when i feel a feeling i've never felt before for this dog, i actually sort of liked him(tense), i felt sorry for him as i closed the cupboard door on his little confused face and walked back to my seat.A while later Mrs Norrie had been talking on and on about multiplacation or volcanos or something like that for hours(over use of time, awhile, on and on, for hours all in one sentence) when a everyone started to hear noises coming from the roof, I thought that coffee would be scared so i went and checked on him in the cupboard, but as I opened the door I found no dog in there!
"Coffee!" I yell firmly at the dog thats jumping from table to table, I told Mrs Norrie that yelling at him will just make him more excited. I knew that i shouldn't of(have) taken my brother's physco(psycho) dog to school, (knowing him he's probably been doing experiments on him (careful of changing tense))he probably does experiments on him, hes(He's) a nutcase according to Mrs Norrie. Oh look shes(she's) managed to grab him by the collar and choke him. I took him off her so i don't walk home with a dead dog. I should sue her for animal abuse, but theres(there's) no way im(I'm) saying anything like that to HER. Once a boy in my class called Sam stood up to Mrs Norrie, no one else has ever tried because after Mrs Norrie got hold of him we never saw him again. Im not suprised that shes(she's) yelling insults about coffee(Coffee), my brother, me and further other people(is this how your character would say it?). I take Coffee to the cupboard at the back of the class, im(I'm) just about to close the cupboard door when i feel a feeling i've never felt before for this dog, i actually sort of liked him(tense), i felt sorry for him as i closed the cupboard door on his little confused face and walked back to my seat. A while later Mrs Norrie had been talking on and on about multiplacation or volcanos or something like that for hours(over use of time, awhile, on and on, for hours all in one sentence) when a everyone started to hear noises coming from the roof, I thought that coffee would be scared so i went and checked on him in the cupboard, but as I opened the door I found no dog in there!